Structure
Hook (1 line). Their year-over-year outcome.
Numbers section. What changed because of the partnership.
Forward look. What you'll deliver next year.
Logistics. Pricing, contract length, key terms. Bottom of the email, not top.
Example
Illustrative example. The companies, names and every number below are fictional.
Subject: Renewal and Q2 review
Jordan,
Your team's onboarding time is down from three weeks to eight days year-over-year. The rollout is doing what we said it would.
What changed this year:
- Workspaces live across all 12 regional teams
- CRM sync shipped in March and is in daily use
- Manager dashboards in beta with your team since April
For year two, we're shipping team-wide analytics in Q3. Your team gets it first. We're also building the reporting export you've asked for twice.
Renewal terms attached. Same rate as year one. Two-year option available with 8% discount. Either way, I'd like 30 minutes next week to align on Q3.
Alex
Why it works
Lead with their outcome, not your milestone. Numbers prove ROI. Forward look ties next year to specific delivery. Logistics last so the relationship leads.
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